Hey lubeck, this is great to hear. I liked Mrs Brown and Gonna Show (the latter I get a real shoegazey vibe from it). Do you plan full band versions? Just be sure to not weigh it down with too much - I think these songs are well suited in a lighter form.

And a tip for budding writers of all sorts is to keep at it - whatever it is, just write, write, write. If you constantly keep at it, you get better and better. Noel said likewise in an interview. Look forward to hearing more of your songs, keep it up!

Only three weeks before the recording ! I'm like a little child waiting for christmas to come.

I can't help, but I'm so excited before this. These 3 weeks will feel very long !

Sorry to hear man. Hopefully you can get it recorded in November, but if nothing else, you could try going down the home studio route. Do you have space and equipment at home that you could use to record with?

The first thing that struck me about Mrs. Brown, was the second verse shifting to a fingerpicking style. I instantly thought of Bowie's Quicksand (when he sings the line "I'm frightened by the total goal / Drawing to the ragged hole"). I think it's incredibly effective in the Bowie song, and it would be a bold choice to make, stylistically, for your song as well. The only problem might be with the fact that your second verse goes on for quite a bit longer than those two lines of the Bowie record above. Maybe you could interweave the fingerpicking guitar with some piano or something to add a bit more colour. (I don't know if you ever managed to get into the Cure, but there's a lovely song of theirs called Homesick, which has Robert Smith's usual guitar style accompanied by a tinkling piano (and later strings, but I'm guessing your budget won't allow for that, at this minute), and it really makes the song. That's sort of what I was getting at) 
I must say though, I think the song finishes much too soon. It's a lovely jaunty rhythm that I think you could quite easily get another minute or so out of. That extra drum beat chucked in at 3:03 makes me want another for around 3:10, and for the melody to come back in for another round of "Hey hey, Mrs. Brown..." But I do like how the guitar falls away and just leaves the percussion - if you do decide to use that bit as a segue into another chorus, it might be nice to stretch it out a bit, and maybe tease the record coming back in: first, a couple of bars of just drums; then add the bass; then any flourishes of piano/guitar arpeggios etc.

I'm struggling to come up with any constructive criticism for Village's Story; I love the song so much in its current guise that I can't think what you'd do it to make it better - save for a clearer vocal take, which I'm sure will come in time and as you confidence grows.
Maybe another acoustic guitar playing some lead in a Take Me Away/Married With Children stylee at 2:10-2:30, perhaps?

Like mystoryisgory, I'd encourage you to try and write another tune for going in place of your Half The World Away cover - although, I can image that when the playlist's all compiled, Half The World Away would complement Village's Story well.

Liar, much like Village's Story, has a great wistful quality to it that makes it difficult for me to imagine it recorded any other way to what it has been here, very sparse and intimate. But you mentioned, I think, that this was one of the tunes you fancied to be Baroque-influenced. Perhaps then, a gentle string section (or as close to one as you can manage on a keyboard) coming in at 1:00, to differentiate the first two verses, that becomes more prominent at 1:25, for your pre-chorus, before falling away again for your "You're just a liar" chorus. The chords you're playing there, and the sound of your voice, juxtapose the words you're singing, giving that part of the record a bittersweet feel - so I think you should try and reign it in a bit for that bit; perhaps just have your rhythm guitar and a bit of arpeggio lead (à la those Holy Holy fellas). Then when you pluck your bass string 2:13, maybe that can usher back in the other instruments - strings, drums etc.
Again, I think you could get another 30 seconds out of this track. At 4:08, it sounds as if you're about to play a little fingerpicking outro - perhaps instead, you could do another chorus, but recycle the little solo you played just before and have that playing down one channel (I'm trying to think of an example of a song that does this - I'm sure there'll be a Be Here Now-era Oasis one that does) while you do.
And down the other channel, you could sing something else alongside the repeated "You're a liar"s, like Thom Yorke does on Paranoid Android (during the later "Rain down on me..."s). I know it's all well and good me saying "just come up with another few lyrics" but I'm just spitballing. Obviously you can ignore any and all of what I'm saying here, if you wish. They're your tunes, after all.

I can imagine a jangly little guitar solo similar to the one at the end of The Divine Comedy's Becoming More Like Alfie, at 1:49 of The Day of Karl Spensson. Providing you don't feel insecure about belting it out a bit, I can see Karl Spensson fitting into the role of "the upbeat one" on the EP, a lot easier than I can Mrs. Brown. Obviously, if you feel your lyrics are too melancholic for that (I can't really tell what you're singing from this recording), you'll want to disregard that advice. But from what I can hear of the music, it's got the lighthearted feel of a I Hope, I Think, I Know-type that could prove a nice contrast to songs like Liar and Village's Story.

When you move on to your pre-chorus on Gonna Show, with that chord change at 1:38, I can imagine strings accompanying your rhythm guitar at the start of each bar for the one-and-two-and beats. Again, along with your fingerpicking bit in the middle, I could imagine some keyboards of sorts.
Annnnnnnd that's me just about running out of ideas, I think. 




I hope this post didn't read as too conceited. It shouldn't've done, because I haven't got the first clue how to put a record together. All the ideas I put forward are just that - ideas.
But that your tunes have been able to stimulate my imagination at all (unfortunately, quite a difficult task, these days) is a good sign I think. 

theyknowwhatimean Thanks for the very long feedbacks ! I appreciate it.

I find your ideas very interesting and some are pretty what I had in mind when I wrote it (wouldn't you become a producer later, eh ? ) . Pianos and strings will be the only different instruments apart the obvious ones (guitars, bass, drums).

About the Bowie song, I knew it, but it was not what I had in mind while I was writing "Mrs Brown". In fact, it was "Sway" by the Stones and I feared it was too visible... ( "did you ever wake up to find "; " here's the story of this oh sweet confusion ").

About track 3, I still don't know what song will finish on there. I have 8/9 songs that could replace HTWA, but I don't know if any could fit between "Village's Story" and "Liar".
"The Day of Karl Spensson" is indeed the upbeat track of the EP (that I hope I could record in a couple of months), the kind of pop/rock who gives a bit more energy.

Thanks again for the feedback and glad you liked it It changes a bit from songwriting forum where when I put the 5 demos, they said "they were ok to the cheap with the friends, but was never good enough to be on an EP...


Rolo thanks for the feedback I agree my vocals need to be more confident. I always fear to be out of tune, so I restain my voice, what I know, is a bad thing. Glad you liked the melodies.

I've seen you've uploaded songs for a fututre album, I'll tell you what I think about it soon

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I like them. Other people have given great advice already and I can't really think of anything else right now.

One thing I want to say, even though it's mentioned already, is try to get more power on your vocals.

Good luck

Exciting news! Congrats lubeck! 

In my little city in the south of France. We'll probably play some show in Lyon, aswell, but later (April/May).

I really like the chill vibe of this song. The hopeful lyric is nice as well.

Go on then.

Good lyrics and voice. melody remind me retro a bit 60's work. Good demo looking forward full band version with other songs

I like your voice. A lot.